Understanding of university life
Every year, a lot of students want to enter university for their future and it is [add article] big dream for many students. When I have [tense!] prepared [add a prep]university exam, I could be [was] stressful and thinking about how can [take this out] my future life. That is [Tense] difficult part of my life. My dreams come [T] true but after the [out] getting in to university, some students courses can [may] failed [Gr; some sts may fail their courses] [subject inconsistency; my dreams and some sts- distorts the cohesion]. I believe that two important factors [that] lead to failure of university students are aware of choices [gr; do you mean not being aware of choices?] and responsibility [?; what leads to failure: responsibility or lack of responsibility?]. [Your intro is good, but be careful with the language: tense and grammar!..]
First of all, many students have not [gr] [art] very clear idea about their future education. To illustrate, when I was [prep] middle school, my family said that you [who?] became [T] a dentist. But I hated that this idea. [prep] End of the high school, I preferred teaching and won [wv] it. but some students [v] not aware of their own goals or aim.in this result [as a result], they can not development [wf; n- v] of themselves and create not [gr] good fields of study [?]. Thus they may not successes [wf; n- v] in their education.
Moreover, a lot of students do not care [prep] discipline. I think discipline means self control. it includes that [?] responsibilities themselves. That is to say, if you are students, you must do own homework or assignment but some students usually spend a minimum amount of time studying. Also , they do not like regularly attend in class and lessons. So they make mistake their homework or in exams.
To sum up, [in the light of] the above of the [out] information, I will say that every student must control themselves. They should care about their courses and responsibilities. thay should only know that what do [out] you [they; cohesion!] want about the future in education and their family or teacher can support theirs ideas.
Ebru,
Your ideas for the essay are good; you need to be more careful with the language to convey the ideas.
Thanks.
Here is your LFP. [you may want to aim at using more academic (AWL) and subject-specific (off-list) words]
Lexical Frequency Profile (LFP):
K1 words (1-1000): 87%
K2 words (1001-2000): 6%
AWL words (academic): 4%
Off-list words (subject-specific, technical, or misspelled words): 3%
2k types: aim_[1] attend_[1] discipline_[2] education_[3] hated_[1] information_[1] lessons_[1] lot_[2] mistake_[1] preferred_[1] regularly_[1] responsibilities_[2] responsibility_[1] self_[1]
AWL types: assignment_[1] aware_[2] create_[1] factors_[1] goals_[1] illustrate_[1] minimum_[1] stressful_[1] sum_[1]
OFF types: dentist_[1] exam_[1] exams_[1] homework_[2] successes_[1] thay_[1]
08 March 2008
06 March 2008
Week3- Cause&Effect: Important Feedback
Hi,
I would like to thank those who have kindly posted their essays on the topic, "factors leading to failure among university students".
The ideas and arguments you have presented are usually good and seem relevant to the factors we discussed in class that affect university student's academic performances and lead to success and failure depending on their presence or absence.
I would like to draw your attention that our main focus is on the causes of university failure; however, some of the essays posted carry the risk of getting off track, that is, some essays read like they are opinion essays, or essays giving advice to the readers about how they should avoid failure and seek success. There are different kinds of essays, and cause-effect is one of them. So when the task requires you to write a cause-effect essay, your main focus should be placed on that.
Thanks, and looking forward to more essays posted on the website.
I would like to thank those who have kindly posted their essays on the topic, "factors leading to failure among university students".
The ideas and arguments you have presented are usually good and seem relevant to the factors we discussed in class that affect university student's academic performances and lead to success and failure depending on their presence or absence.
I would like to draw your attention that our main focus is on the causes of university failure; however, some of the essays posted carry the risk of getting off track, that is, some essays read like they are opinion essays, or essays giving advice to the readers about how they should avoid failure and seek success. There are different kinds of essays, and cause-effect is one of them. So when the task requires you to write a cause-effect essay, your main focus should be placed on that.
Thanks, and looking forward to more essays posted on the website.
05 March 2008
Week3- Cause&Effect- NurayK''s Essay
University Life
You must have studied hard to get into a university. I think you were a succesful student at high school so that you have come to university. But why students fail to succeed at university[?]. There can be a lot of reasons for that but mainly, difficulty of life, adapting a new environment, friends and boy/girl friends, and lack of motivation are the main factors. [good; TS is clear, explicit, and also shows that this is a cause-effect essay]
First, university students usually go away from [their] families to study and they face a lot of difficulties and have to manage them by [take out] on their own. While they are trying to take this responsibility appropriately, they can’t totally focus on their lessons. This may result in failure. College students have to manage to live by themselves, this is hard for them because they (probably) didn’t have to do this job before [do you mean for the first time in their lives the sts have to face such a challenge?].
Secondly, adapting the new environment can seem better for students. Trying to be popular among friends, students can not keep control. As a consequence they get out of their target. This may bring another responsibility to study harder. I mean failure for some period. [your point is not very clear in this paragraph; what exactly is the factor that impedes students' academic performance?]
Next, we shouldn’t forget that college students are not “kids” so they may have boy/girl friends to go out for (long) hours. However, this also seem good but what if they argue or split up? This may affect a student deeply for this reason, usually [add an article] student does not study and fail. Classmates or other friends are the same as boy/girl friends so they may cause students fail, too. Long long hours chatting, spending long hours in cafes etc. [this clause reads incomplete; link it somehow]
After that college students need to keep up motivation. They need to study. Sometimes harder and harder [change it into a clause linked to the previous clause; i.e. as it is, it looks an incomplete sentence]. I mean difficult exam periods, homework assignments and projects are the obligations which may make students fed up. In short[,] work overload cause failure sometimes, so students should be careful. And [make it part of the clause] keep the motivation with some activities,with having fun and being encouraged by family.
In conclusion, being successful is difficult as a university student. However it is sometimes harder to keep on successfully because difficult life, adapting new environment and lack of motivation are main factors for failure. [some concluding remarks on how sts should overcome these obstacles??]
Nuray,
Good start, but later it seems you've jotted down the essay in a hurry; be careful with incomplete clauses.
The second cause (2nd par) may be written in a more effective way so that it can better explain what you're trying to say..
Revise it and then post again.
Thanks,
You must have studied hard to get into a university. I think you were a succesful student at high school so that you have come to university. But why students fail to succeed at university[?]. There can be a lot of reasons for that but mainly, difficulty of life, adapting a new environment, friends and boy/girl friends, and lack of motivation are the main factors. [good; TS is clear, explicit, and also shows that this is a cause-effect essay]
First, university students usually go away from [their] families to study and they face a lot of difficulties and have to manage them by [take out] on their own. While they are trying to take this responsibility appropriately, they can’t totally focus on their lessons. This may result in failure. College students have to manage to live by themselves, this is hard for them because they (probably) didn’t have to do this job before [do you mean for the first time in their lives the sts have to face such a challenge?].
Secondly, adapting the new environment can seem better for students. Trying to be popular among friends, students can not keep control. As a consequence they get out of their target. This may bring another responsibility to study harder. I mean failure for some period. [your point is not very clear in this paragraph; what exactly is the factor that impedes students' academic performance?]
Next, we shouldn’t forget that college students are not “kids” so they may have boy/girl friends to go out for (long) hours. However, this also seem good but what if they argue or split up? This may affect a student deeply for this reason, usually [add an article] student does not study and fail. Classmates or other friends are the same as boy/girl friends so they may cause students fail, too. Long long hours chatting, spending long hours in cafes etc. [this clause reads incomplete; link it somehow]
After that college students need to keep up motivation. They need to study. Sometimes harder and harder [change it into a clause linked to the previous clause; i.e. as it is, it looks an incomplete sentence]. I mean difficult exam periods, homework assignments and projects are the obligations which may make students fed up. In short[,] work overload cause failure sometimes, so students should be careful. And [make it part of the clause] keep the motivation with some activities,with having fun and being encouraged by family.
In conclusion, being successful is difficult as a university student. However it is sometimes harder to keep on successfully because difficult life, adapting new environment and lack of motivation are main factors for failure. [some concluding remarks on how sts should overcome these obstacles??]
Nuray,
Good start, but later it seems you've jotted down the essay in a hurry; be careful with incomplete clauses.
The second cause (2nd par) may be written in a more effective way so that it can better explain what you're trying to say..
Revise it and then post again.
Thanks,
Week3- Cause-Effect: DenizK's Essay
OBSTACLES AT OUR SUCCESS
In order to be successful, there are some basic rules. On the other hand in order not to be failure [gr] we should avoid doing some kinds of things such as unnecessaryly [sp] spending so much time or sitting in front of the table many hours, not matching the schedule, not choosing suitable friends according to us, not repeating [wrong verb; use revise] the lectures after the school, [add diffculty here] adapting new environment etc.. [revise your thesis statement; you have the same problem as Rabia's (read the feedback I gave her). Your focus in this essay is the causes of failure, so your TS (thesis statement) should clearly indicate this; you can write, like: factors such as difficulty adapting a new environment... may result in failure]
Firstly, friendship is one of the most important factor that lead to failure [is it friendship or choosing the wrong friends that lead to failure?] . lf you are with hardworking people, or not they affect you negative [reads a bit odd; there is a reference confusion, what is it that affects you negatively?]. So we should be careful about it. [revise this paragraph; first clearly state the factor and how it may cause failure, and support it with evidence and examples]
Secondly, when we make a program we should match [wrong verb; use stick to] it. lf you are not loyal to your schedule and you do whatever you want, your schedule get mixed and you have difficulty in following your lectures. In one day we have so much leisure time. We go out with our friends, chatting etc. But when working time comes, we don’t want to study. Normally if we should repeat what we do at school every night, we don’t have any difficulty when our exams start. [again, your focus is a bit distorted here; state what factor leads to failure and then explain with examples how the factor leads to failure]
Leaving from our parents sometimes can create problem for our studying. Adapting new people, new life and new places [may] have [negative] effects on us. We can cope with this problem by looking at the positive sides of new life. But if we can not solve this, it has a big obstacles in front of our studying. [good; this paragraph reads better and is more focused on the cause]
Always studying is not effective also [?]. Sitting on your chair and trying to do something [this is not very clear; do you mean sitting without doing anything?] makes you bored and in the end your working/ studying desire declines. At university both becoming social and hardworking bring success. lf you balance these, you can easyly [sp] become successful. [Start your conclusion with a summary of the factors and how they negatively affect students' academic performances. Then, as part of your suggestions and advice, you can mention how to balance social and academic life, etc.]
In order to be successful, there are some basic rules. On the other hand in order not to be failure [gr] we should avoid doing some kinds of things such as unnecessaryly [sp] spending so much time or sitting in front of the table many hours, not matching the schedule, not choosing suitable friends according to us, not repeating [wrong verb; use revise] the lectures after the school, [add diffculty here] adapting new environment etc.. [revise your thesis statement; you have the same problem as Rabia's (read the feedback I gave her). Your focus in this essay is the causes of failure, so your TS (thesis statement) should clearly indicate this; you can write, like: factors such as difficulty adapting a new environment... may result in failure]
Firstly, friendship is one of the most important factor that lead to failure [is it friendship or choosing the wrong friends that lead to failure?] . lf you are with hardworking people, or not they affect you negative [reads a bit odd; there is a reference confusion, what is it that affects you negatively?]. So we should be careful about it. [revise this paragraph; first clearly state the factor and how it may cause failure, and support it with evidence and examples]
Secondly, when we make a program we should match [wrong verb; use stick to] it. lf you are not loyal to your schedule and you do whatever you want, your schedule get mixed and you have difficulty in following your lectures. In one day we have so much leisure time. We go out with our friends, chatting etc. But when working time comes, we don’t want to study. Normally if we should repeat what we do at school every night, we don’t have any difficulty when our exams start. [again, your focus is a bit distorted here; state what factor leads to failure and then explain with examples how the factor leads to failure]
Leaving from our parents sometimes can create problem for our studying. Adapting new people, new life and new places [may] have [negative] effects on us. We can cope with this problem by looking at the positive sides of new life. But if we can not solve this, it has a big obstacles in front of our studying. [good; this paragraph reads better and is more focused on the cause]
Always studying is not effective also [?]. Sitting on your chair and trying to do something [this is not very clear; do you mean sitting without doing anything?] makes you bored and in the end your working/ studying desire declines. At university both becoming social and hardworking bring success. lf you balance these, you can easyly [sp] become successful. [Start your conclusion with a summary of the factors and how they negatively affect students' academic performances. Then, as part of your suggestions and advice, you can mention how to balance social and academic life, etc.]
DenizK,
1. Punctuation: leave a space after punctuation (commas, periods, etc).
2. Read the feedback I gave to Rabia and Hatice. The general problem I have observed in all the three of yours' essays is the focus problem! Keep the focus on the causes!...
3. Please revise your essay and then you can post the revised version..
Thanks,
Deniz Küçüktuna - 070179
Deniz Küçüktuna - 070179
Week3- Cause&Effect- HaticeE's Essay
HOW FAILURE GOES AWAY?
Does a university help you to be the best? The university has lots of advantages for a person to become successful. But there are some bad things that don’t give you a hand (what are these things and what are they specically responsible for?- identify the cause-effect focus of your essay...).
Firstly, university students need a peaceful family. Their family should support them not only concretely but also abstractly (try different words here, like not only material and financial but also moral and emotional- Refer to tureng.com tr/eng dictionary) . Because a student without a supporter doesn’t have much power. [get rid of the full-stop and link the previous clause with the following] Students can get this power by the help of being happy and relaxed. [you may add more support here explaining how lack of such material and moral support from the family and friends can impair success- and be careful your focus should be on factors leading to failure, not sucess; keep the focus on that]
Secondly, students must be aware of their lectures otherwise failure will be inevitable. Namely, ignoring the importance of the lessons will take the students to the dark [may need to explain what dark specifically mean], A(a) nd this darkness swallow them [how? - too much of implicit reference; be more direct]. In the end they [who?] will be disappeared [Gr- use active voice]. Whethet [sp] they’d [write out] like to study or not the lectures improve them if they take care about. [this part is not very clear! again, remember, your focus is on the factor and you are explaining how it leads to failure]
Finally, university students feel they are free and think there’s no need to take attention about their responsibilities anymore. Yet, it results in collapse. Because responsibilities make people’s life easier. If there is an easy life failure goes away. So, students can be successful ones who make better Works [? like what] in their lives.
In conclusion if students want to be successful their [who?] must support them, they should take care about their lectures and responsibilities. The more students do these the more they get [a better verb here maybe, that collacates with success] success. And the failure wants a place where nobody can find it. [nice concluding remark!]
Hatice,
1. Try to keep your focus more on the causes of failure; keep the suggestions you are giving for success for the conclusion paragraph. This way, your essay would read better on topic ending with a nice conclusion with some personal advice....
2. If you have your thesis statement clearly stating the focus of your essay and implying the content of the body paragraph, it would be easier for the reader to get the gist of each supporting paragraph.
Thanks.
ps. Make the necessary changes and then you can post the revised essay...
Hatice ERARSLAN
070191
Does a university help you to be the best? The university has lots of advantages for a person to become successful. But there are some bad things that don’t give you a hand (what are these things and what are they specically responsible for?- identify the cause-effect focus of your essay...).
Firstly, university students need a peaceful family. Their family should support them not only concretely but also abstractly (try different words here, like not only material and financial but also moral and emotional- Refer to tureng.com tr/eng dictionary) . Because a student without a supporter doesn’t have much power. [get rid of the full-stop and link the previous clause with the following] Students can get this power by the help of being happy and relaxed. [you may add more support here explaining how lack of such material and moral support from the family and friends can impair success- and be careful your focus should be on factors leading to failure, not sucess; keep the focus on that]
Secondly, students must be aware of their lectures otherwise failure will be inevitable. Namely, ignoring the importance of the lessons will take the students to the dark [may need to explain what dark specifically mean], A(a) nd this darkness swallow them [how? - too much of implicit reference; be more direct]. In the end they [who?] will be disappeared [Gr- use active voice]. Whethet [sp] they’d [write out] like to study or not the lectures improve them if they take care about. [this part is not very clear! again, remember, your focus is on the factor and you are explaining how it leads to failure]
Finally, university students feel they are free and think there’s no need to take attention about their responsibilities anymore. Yet, it results in collapse. Because responsibilities make people’s life easier. If there is an easy life failure goes away. So, students can be successful ones who make better Works [? like what] in their lives.
In conclusion if students want to be successful their [who?] must support them, they should take care about their lectures and responsibilities. The more students do these the more they get [a better verb here maybe, that collacates with success] success. And the failure wants a place where nobody can find it. [nice concluding remark!]
Hatice,
1. Try to keep your focus more on the causes of failure; keep the suggestions you are giving for success for the conclusion paragraph. This way, your essay would read better on topic ending with a nice conclusion with some personal advice....
2. If you have your thesis statement clearly stating the focus of your essay and implying the content of the body paragraph, it would be easier for the reader to get the gist of each supporting paragraph.
Thanks.
ps. Make the necessary changes and then you can post the revised essay...
Hatice ERARSLAN
070191
Week3- Cause&Effect- Rabia's Essay
WHO WANTS FAILURE?
Have you ever heard about a book called “Path to Success”? It’s a grammar book used by mostly students preparing for the YDS [define it] exam. What a strange topic it has, doesn’t it? The path to success has surely many obstacles. In other words, these obstacles lead to failure. If you don’t want to see failure in your life especially as a university student, you have to consider at least three things.[this sentence reads as if your essay is about giving advice/ opinion to the reader; however, our focus is on causes of failure, so your thesis statement must be revised; plus write what these three causes are explicitly in your thesis statement]
Firstly, don’t ignore your lessons [again, keep your focus on the cause of failure, not how to avoid failure]. I mean a student in his first year at the university, usually make a big mistake of not caring for the lectures adequately. Some courses may be easier than you’ve expected. However, it doesn’t necessaraly mean that you don’t have to study at all. [so add here more how students may have problems when they underestimate the courseload...]
Secondly, a new student at the university feels himself so free that it makes him fail. Think about a student in high school. What does he do? He studies a lot for the university enterance [sp] exam. He can’t go out late without his parent’s permission and so forth [time reference! when is this? make it clear this refers to the highschool time]. When this student goes to university, he’ll be free to decide what to do. He won’t have to get permission from someone. No matter how messy his room is, nobody will warn or punish him. In the end because of all these he has to deal with failure. [good, this paragraph is more focused on the factor causing failure]
Thirdly, without family support, success seems far away. Because families act as friends. For instance; when the midterms or finals begin, you may get discouraged. Your family are your angels at that time, ready to stand by you. [ok, but tell the reader how the lack of support from the family may result in failure]
In conclusion, not to fail in your education life you should care about the obstacles including feeling freedom, not having family supports and the lectures. You only need to know what you really want and why are you in the university. Unless you find answer to these questions, failure won’t abandon you [good; you summarised the factors leading to failure and then here you can give now some suggestions and personal advice...].
Rabia,
Your essay has the similar issues as Hatice's. Please also read the comments and feedback I gave on her essay...
Please revise your essay and then you can post it again.
Rabia KARAKURT
070180
Have you ever heard about a book called “Path to Success”? It’s a grammar book used by mostly students preparing for the YDS [define it] exam. What a strange topic it has, doesn’t it? The path to success has surely many obstacles. In other words, these obstacles lead to failure. If you don’t want to see failure in your life especially as a university student, you have to consider at least three things.[this sentence reads as if your essay is about giving advice/ opinion to the reader; however, our focus is on causes of failure, so your thesis statement must be revised; plus write what these three causes are explicitly in your thesis statement]
Firstly, don’t ignore your lessons [again, keep your focus on the cause of failure, not how to avoid failure]. I mean a student in his first year at the university, usually make a big mistake of not caring for the lectures adequately. Some courses may be easier than you’ve expected. However, it doesn’t necessaraly mean that you don’t have to study at all. [so add here more how students may have problems when they underestimate the courseload...]
Secondly, a new student at the university feels himself so free that it makes him fail. Think about a student in high school. What does he do? He studies a lot for the university enterance [sp] exam. He can’t go out late without his parent’s permission and so forth [time reference! when is this? make it clear this refers to the highschool time]. When this student goes to university, he’ll be free to decide what to do. He won’t have to get permission from someone. No matter how messy his room is, nobody will warn or punish him. In the end because of all these he has to deal with failure. [good, this paragraph is more focused on the factor causing failure]
Thirdly, without family support, success seems far away. Because families act as friends. For instance; when the midterms or finals begin, you may get discouraged. Your family are your angels at that time, ready to stand by you. [ok, but tell the reader how the lack of support from the family may result in failure]
In conclusion, not to fail in your education life you should care about the obstacles including feeling freedom, not having family supports and the lectures. You only need to know what you really want and why are you in the university. Unless you find answer to these questions, failure won’t abandon you [good; you summarised the factors leading to failure and then here you can give now some suggestions and personal advice...].
Rabia,
Your essay has the similar issues as Hatice's. Please also read the comments and feedback I gave on her essay...
Please revise your essay and then you can post it again.
Rabia KARAKURT
070180
04 March 2008
Week3- Cause&Effect- Erkan: Steps to My Essay-3
For many students, facing the challenges of university life may be hard to handle. And the scope of challenges at university is beyond the academic requirements. Think of a student who just got into university, left his family for the first time, and struggling to adapt a completely different social and academic environment; it is no surprise why many freshmen go under depression in their first year at university. Since many students fail to adapt university life, let alone the academic requirements, they experience failure in their courses and social life.
The second factor that may lead to failure is the students' misunderstanding of the concept of 'freedom'. After leaving their families and starting to live on their own, some students think taking responsibility of their own lives means 'no responsibility at all'. Complete freedom tempts such students to take it easy when it comes to planning their academic studies and managing their time; that is, due the involvement in non-academic activities there is not enough time left for academic responsibilites. Usually the beginning of the school semester is not very loaded and the students are not aware of the problem, and when they are it is too late to catch up.
Yet another factor contributing to failure is that the financial burden of university forces some students to work while studying. Having to work, in return, may make it difficult for the students to leave enough time for their academic studies. To illustrate, the results of a study (http://www.brockport.edu/career01/upromise.htm) reveals that full-time employment may impair student performance. The study shows that among college students in the U.S. 55 percent of those who work 35 or more hours per week experience the negative effect on their studies. As the students who work usually have less time to spend on their course related work, their performances in the lessons and exams decreases and this leads to failure.
To sum up, [to be continued...have to leave for the FB-Seville match!..]
Time spent: 1 hour [9 to 10 pm]
The second factor that may lead to failure is the students' misunderstanding of the concept of 'freedom'. After leaving their families and starting to live on their own, some students think taking responsibility of their own lives means 'no responsibility at all'. Complete freedom tempts such students to take it easy when it comes to planning their academic studies and managing their time; that is, due the involvement in non-academic activities there is not enough time left for academic responsibilites. Usually the beginning of the school semester is not very loaded and the students are not aware of the problem, and when they are it is too late to catch up.
Yet another factor contributing to failure is that the financial burden of university forces some students to work while studying. Having to work, in return, may make it difficult for the students to leave enough time for their academic studies. To illustrate, the results of a study (http://www.brockport.edu/career01/upromise.htm) reveals that full-time employment may impair student performance. The study shows that among college students in the U.S. 55 percent of those who work 35 or more hours per week experience the negative effect on their studies. As the students who work usually have less time to spend on their course related work, their performances in the lessons and exams decreases and this leads to failure.
To sum up, [to be continued...have to leave for the FB-Seville match!..]
Time spent: 1 hour [9 to 10 pm]
03 March 2008
Week3- Cause&Effect- Erkan: Steps to My Essay-2
Step 4. Thesis:
Among many things, the three major factors that lead to failure among university students are the difficulty adapting to a new environment and life-style, failing to take responsibilty, and financial difficulties.
Step 5. Introduction:
Think about the stressful time you had when preparing for the university; we all had one aim: getting into a university. Every year thousands of students have to go through the same painful process: countless hours of studying, many tests taken, sleepless nights figting over stress of risk of failing the university entrance exam, dreaming about how their lives would change after getting into university, and so on. Entering a university is a dream for many that is difficult to come true. So why is it that many students fail their university courses when their dreams come true? There may be many factors causing failure at university, but among others there are three major issues that lead to student failure: adapting to a new environment and life, managing responsibility of staying on one's own feet, and dealing with financial difficulties.
[time spent: 1 hour - 10 to 11 pm]
Among many things, the three major factors that lead to failure among university students are the difficulty adapting to a new environment and life-style, failing to take responsibilty, and financial difficulties.
Step 5. Introduction:
Think about the stressful time you had when preparing for the university; we all had one aim: getting into a university. Every year thousands of students have to go through the same painful process: countless hours of studying, many tests taken, sleepless nights figting over stress of risk of failing the university entrance exam, dreaming about how their lives would change after getting into university, and so on. Entering a university is a dream for many that is difficult to come true. So why is it that many students fail their university courses when their dreams come true? There may be many factors causing failure at university, but among others there are three major issues that lead to student failure: adapting to a new environment and life, managing responsibility of staying on one's own feet, and dealing with financial difficulties.
[time spent: 1 hour - 10 to 11 pm]
Week3- Cause&Effect- Erkan: Steps to My Essay-1
Hi all,
I was wondering how it feels if I put myself in your shoes and try to accomplish a writing assignment; so I decided to get involved in this writing a cause and effect essay: Factors that lead to student failure at university. Here I will post each step I follow when writing my essay.
Step 1. Research about the topic: I did a google search and found a few web sources, like the ones below:
i. http://www.brockport.edu/career01/upromise.htm
ii. http://findarticles.com/p/articles/mi_m0BTR/is_4_22/ai_84599442
Step 2. Analysis: As I read the reasons, arguments and information in the sources I started to have some ideas about what to talk about in my essay.
Step 3. Brainstorming: Now I start to write down whatever comes to my mind:
What factors lead to student failure at university?..
- bad time management (academic and personal responsibilities: too many assignments, cooking, cleaning, etc... )
- difficulty adapting to a different environment; leaving the family
- having to work due to financial reasons
- too much freedom brings problems: bad habits- smoking, alcohol, staying out late, parties, etc..
- what else?..
[Time spent: 2 hours - 8 to 10 pm]
to be continued...
I was wondering how it feels if I put myself in your shoes and try to accomplish a writing assignment; so I decided to get involved in this writing a cause and effect essay: Factors that lead to student failure at university. Here I will post each step I follow when writing my essay.
Step 1. Research about the topic: I did a google search and found a few web sources, like the ones below:
i. http://www.brockport.edu/career01/upromise.htm
ii. http://findarticles.com/p/articles/mi_m0BTR/is_4_22/ai_84599442
Step 2. Analysis: As I read the reasons, arguments and information in the sources I started to have some ideas about what to talk about in my essay.
Step 3. Brainstorming: Now I start to write down whatever comes to my mind:
What factors lead to student failure at university?..
- bad time management (academic and personal responsibilities: too many assignments, cooking, cleaning, etc... )
- difficulty adapting to a different environment; leaving the family
- having to work due to financial reasons
- too much freedom brings problems: bad habits- smoking, alcohol, staying out late, parties, etc..
- what else?..
[Time spent: 2 hours - 8 to 10 pm]
to be continued...
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